Comments

- Just my personal opinion. I don't like how serious Episode 1 is, and I rarely like anything I write that's dramatic. Episode 2 is easily one of my favorites. The beginning of 4 bugs me, like it's too juvenile and lacks smart humor, although I like it when Ess tries to make Alec laugh, and Josh's comment about the cabinet having it coming. I like the piece of dialogue I carry through 5 about the time loop. When I read it, I know it's not all that great, but I had a lot of fun writing this one. Whenever my characters argue about things pertaining to nerdom, I enjoy it. Be wary of a future Master Chief vs. Samus Aran discussion.

- Episode 6 is probably the one I'm most uncertain about. I like particular parts a lot, but the whole "on the field" section didn't flow very well, not did the armory part. It had to be done for the story, but I'd probably redo a good deal of this episode. I like 7 a lot, but I feel guilty resorting to the "poker night" cliche. Still, one of my favorites. I actually tried to use physcial humor in Episode 8 with Luke and the trash basket and stuff. It plays out humorously in my mind, anyway.

- Overall, I don't like the drama or the parts where their job is focused on. I'd rather they made comments about it that left it mysterious, and never fully explained most stuff, since it's not about the job.